Hi and welcome my brave warriors, to another round of wewriwa! This week, I'll continue with the fantasy adventure I've written for last year's NaNoWriMo, called Anoethau.
Artie has finally arrived at Southampton, and is stretching his legs by the fountain at the town square, when an elderly woman and her French Bulldog come on the scene. The dog eyes Artie with open curiosity. All of a sudden, the woman makes a rather strange suggestion...
“Do you want him?”
It took Artie a long second before he realized what she meant by that,
“You mean...your dog?!!”
He waited for the old woman to indicate that she was kidding, but she didn't. When she gave him no sign other than a wholehearted nod, Artie frenetically waved his hand at her in refusal.
“No...no..." he stammered, "I’m just passing through to Wales.."
“Well, that’s exactly what my Cabby likes,” she said tenderly, “a bit of an adventure.”
She persisted on holding the leash out to him, which made him think she wouldn't take no for an answer; and his pulse leapt.
“I don’t get around much these days - so, what do you say?”
@8sunday_writers Idiots and Earthquakes for #8sunday: Do you want him? idiotsearthquakes.blogspot.de/2013/04/weeken…
— Dana Renelt (@dasdanalein) April 6, 2013
Quite a dilemma for him. Or adventure ahead? Great excerpt!
ReplyDeleteWe'll see... *she writes, auspiciously*. :) Thank you for visiting me, Ryan.
DeleteI've heard of people with babies, in some countries, placing them in the arms of a stranger and taking off. But I have never heard of someone offering a dog to a stranger in this way. I would not want to receive a dog in this fashion. I hope that he is able to gracefully get out of this. Unless, he wants that dog!
ReplyDeleteI've had the same association as you when I published this excerpt. Never experienced something like this firsthand, but I've heard of it. Next week, there will be more info..Thank you for stopping by, Carol :)
DeleteLOL! I love his reaction to "Do you want him?" I can just see his eyebrows shooting up. I know mine would be. This is great...and why do I sense he will end up keeping this dog?
ReplyDeleteThat's the writerly instinct, and good insight J. Rose. :) Thank you!
DeleteFun scene. I like how it's both awkward and kind of sweet. It also brings up quite a few questions (most of them about who that woman is and why she wants to give up her dog.) Good hooks to keep the reader flipping the page. ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you Aheila! I hope you're right about people wanting to flip those pages - honestly, that's something I can't even imagine at this point... I better manage get Anoethau edited soon. :D
DeleteI love the awkwardness here. This is one of the situations where I want to believe I'd jump in with no hesitation...though I'm not entirely sure I would. LOL
ReplyDeleteTo be honest I wouldn't know how to behave or what to say to get out of this..or if I even wanted to taking one look at the dog. :)
DeleteHaha, I really feel for Artie here! You've plopped him right into something weird and unexpected and therefore cool. I can't help worrying about the dog too! Definitely interested to see where this goes :D
ReplyDeleteThanks Marcia :) Glad you enjoyed it!
DeleteOh wow, Artie has a problem! This is a fascinating story development, can't wait to see what happens next. Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteThank you Veronica! :)
DeleteSomehow a French Bulldog doesn't seem quite the right dog for a walking trip.
ReplyDeleteHey Sue Ann, yes, that's true, one would imagine that a long-legged creature would be better suited for extensive travels... teehee :)
DeleteWell now, that's an interesting and unexpected twist. Makes me very curious about the dog ... and what's to come. I'm looking forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteDelightful twist! :-) Oh, the adventures that must surely lie ahead! I'm thinking that ain't no ordinary dog ;-)
ReplyDeleteI think there is more to this dog than meets the eye! Nice snippet.
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